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It Just Takes So Long
Random sections of John/Liz ficlets that are driving me crazy in their unfinishedness. They're all lines or bits of paragraphs... none are finished. *whimpers*

Would love if anyone had ideas, directions, or the desire to take and turn it into something. Am at a loss and offer them up to you.



*

Four steps down the hall he notices that they're walking in pace.

*

She'd been mostly silent since the beginning, taking the time to carefully school her thoughts so he – and he guessed it was the same for everyone else - only got occasional glimpses of her mental monologues, and oddly, what sounded like memorized passages of diplomatic guide books.

She was quite good at it.

From across the table where she clicked away at her laptop, the corners of her lips quirked up slightly.

Apparently he was very bad at it.

Knowing it was futile, he probed at her mental wall. She didn't even look up, but he got a barrage of Russian verb conjugations anyway.

*

He kisses her, and she's reminded of Simon.

*

It's after someone catches her taking a sip of his coffee that the betting increases; the pool encompassing most members of Atlantis and offering a wide range of winnings including shuttle chauffeuring and bottles of their newest vodka-like alcohol.

Ford and Carson inform him of these latest developments with their usual teasing banter, unable to even confirm or deny the rumors themselves. Not that it stops them from hinting around the subject from time to time, waiting for him to reveal something; Ford already has a month's load of laundry on the line.

Their relationship – be it a partnership, sex, or whatever level of commitment the majority agreed upon for the day – had become the water cooler conversation of the city. Professionalism wasn't affected, the gossip rightly remaining an after-hours activity, but so much as look at Elizabeth in a meeting and Ford would gleefully relay the moment to him the next morning.

*

He steps out of the gate angry. It's almost palpable and she regrets that he's come.

*

She doesn't say a word to him, and that, perhaps, is the worst of all.

*

They are three days in the infirmary, the dozen of them quarantined from the city, and she suggests poker.

Some wit yells out, "strip poker!" and she doesn't even flush.

*

She takes a picture of him when he's asleep, his face half in shadow, his body curled to the side with legs stretched out haphazardly over the bedspread.

They have a play for the camera when she shows the picture to him – he's more adept at pinning her to the mattress, but he's horribly ticklish and she wins.

No one will ever see it, she promises.

*

Things change when the gate stops connecting to Earth.

It's gradual, a slow acceptance of their new situation in the universe. After all, there's a lot of troubleshooting to go through before anyone is convinced.

Two ZPMs. Twenty-six tries. Three and a half months.

Even the scientists are only going through the motions, but Elizabeth doesn't know how to tell them to stop.

They are the beginning and it feels like the end.

*

feeling: frustrated frustrated
listening to: amy hit the atmosphere // counting crows

21 whispers :: tell me a secret
Comments
muldy From: muldy Date: July 7th, 2005 09:09 am (UTC) (Link)
He kisses her, and she's reminded of Simon.

I know I shouldn't...but I like that line...could get some good angst from it - planning to write a story about it?!
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 7th, 2005 10:23 pm (UTC) (Link)
Hee, I know it's all dark and omgno! And meh, would love to write a story about it, but to be honest I can't think of what the hell the plot would be. ;)
icarus_abides From: icarus_abides Date: July 7th, 2005 12:33 pm (UTC) (Link)
I loved the 'mental block' bit that you have. The way you wrote that is awesome. I'd be interested to see you continue that one... and the Strip Poker one because, dammit, I'm a sucker for fluff (even better if it's smut *winks*)

I may be borrowing your She takes a picture of him when he's asleep, if that's ok with you. I have yet to dip my pen in Atlantian ink, and would love to start on one. :)
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 7th, 2005 10:26 pm (UTC) (Link)
Ooh, smut. Mmm. And it seems most people were interested in that one, so I shall attempt it first. :D

And do take the photo bit! I'm all for encouraging Atlantian fic. You're welcome to change it about to fit your tastes... I've no aching connection to it. ;)
anr From: anr Date: July 7th, 2005 12:51 pm (UTC) (Link)
Hmmm. Love these. I especially like the last one.
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 7th, 2005 10:27 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks. :) You're welcome to turn 'em into fics... *pokes*
anr From: anr Date: July 15th, 2005 10:47 pm (UTC) (Link)
lol! Oh, I wish. Unfortunately I've got more than enough ideas of my own floating around. Until I finish some of those, I'm steering clear of other peoples... :)
elvinborn From: elvinborn Date: July 7th, 2005 03:40 pm (UTC) (Link)
For whatever reason, I am currently incapable of writing anything. even drabbles. *kicks writer's block* But I'd love to see somebody finish this one:
It's after someone catches her taking a sip of his coffee that the betting increases

or that last one.
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 7th, 2005 10:30 pm (UTC) (Link)
*kicks writer's block*

*helps you*

It's getting to the point where I've read all the Shep/Weir fics that are out there and am going through a needy phase. ;)
From: nyuszi Date: July 7th, 2005 05:14 pm (UTC) (Link)
these are beautiful... i hope you'll manage to finish at least some of them. me curious... ;)

i so should start writing up my bits and pieces... they're just floating around my mind, and from time to time i remember that i've forgotten quite a few, and try to fish for them again... it's futile...

but these... these are great. ;) especially the photo one. wish i had that pic of shep. ;)
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 7th, 2005 10:33 pm (UTC) (Link)
i so should start writing up my bits and pieces...

Yes yes you should. :D

I actually came up with one of my Atlantis flashfics because I had about four random "bits" that, when pulled together, made sense. Somewhat. *looks around*
From: tangerrine Date: July 7th, 2005 05:23 pm (UTC) (Link)
*de-lurks*

I really like the first one. Now I want to know what happens next! :)

The photo one is my favorite, though. I hope you'll continue that, or put it into a story.
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 7th, 2005 10:39 pm (UTC) (Link)
Hi! I apologize for the state of my journal, it's random babbling that has become a permanant mess. :D

I really like the first one.

It's one of my favorite lines, actually. I originally wrote it for my first Atlantis fic, but it didn't quite fit, and it's just been sitting mournfully on my harddrive since. *sigh* But one day... one day a plot will come to me and the poor sentence will fulfill it's purpose in fanfiction. ;)

The photo one is my favorite, though. I hope you'll continue that, or put it into a story.

Am handing that one off to icarus_abides so hopefully in better hands it will be written!
From: tangerrine Date: July 8th, 2005 05:56 pm (UTC) (Link)
Mmm... I feel your pain. I have so, so many random snippets of stories on my hard drive that I like the premise of but can't find a way to use. But oh well, I guess they could just be considered practice for future stories... :)

phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 9th, 2005 12:23 am (UTC) (Link)
Heh, we should gather everybody's bits (there are likely loads) and put together the Great Atlantis Snippets Fic. ;P
mspooh From: mspooh Date: July 7th, 2005 06:45 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh! So many little bits of John/Lizzie floating around! Finish! :P

Four steps down the hall he notices that they're walking in pace.

I love this. It seems like a revelation that would occur to either one of them, out of the blue, to suddenly realize how in sync they are with each other.

The second one with: Knowing it was futile, he probed at her mental wall. She didn't even look up, but he got a barrage of Russian verb conjugations anyway.

Hee! That one made me lmao. Was that supposed to be a telepathy fic? I have complete faith in John, and that he'll eventually break down those mental walls with his persistence and cuteness and... erm, John-ness. *pokes this bunny*

Also pokes the one with the betting pool, because it sounds deliciously fluffy and I love any fic bunnies where the Atlanteans are shippers, too. And poking the one where he steps out of the gate angry, because PissedOff!John is so damn sexy and intense. And poking the photo one, because of Teh Cute! And that last one... omg, the angst.

Um... yeah. *pokes you* Do one of those. *poke poke poke* *smiles sweetly*
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 7th, 2005 10:44 pm (UTC) (Link)
It seems like a revelation that would occur to either one of them, out of the blue, to suddenly realize how in sync they are with each other.

Wanna finish it? WANNA? To me it's almost like a complete little mini-fic and I've no idea how/when/where/why this sentence would be included as part of a story.

Was that supposed to be a telepathy fic?

*wooks* Yes. Hee. I've another one I've been working on that ended up going a bit better than this. But I love Elizabeth being all "must think of politics and russian to avoid everyone hearing me!" ;)

*pokes you* Do one of those. *poke poke poke*

*is thoroughly poked*
mspooh From: mspooh Date: July 7th, 2005 11:02 pm (UTC) (Link)
Ha. lmfao. Oh, if I could only write a SGA (or any scifi) fic and have it not suck. If Atlantis were a teen melodrama, I'd be all over it. ;) I wouldn't even know where to start... And you're right, that one line does seem rather complete.
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 8th, 2005 04:07 am (UTC) (Link)
If Atlantis were a teen melodrama, I'd be all over it.

Well now. There's an idea. ;)

And since SG1 already did the whole "adult in a teen body", I say you've been approved for an Atlantis version. :D
mylittleredgirl From: mylittleredgirl Date: July 10th, 2005 05:27 pm (UTC) (Link)
I love you with a deep and abiding love, omg. SO nice to come home to little Sheppard/Weir snippets!! They're all so remarkable, and, in my brain, seem to flow in the same story. YAYYYYY for random ficness, and yay especially for you!

(last week pellucid and I discussed your fic-ish and vid-ish awesomeness in a French-Canadian café. I think this makes you famous.)

These are wonderful and make my brain buzz in nice ways. YAY. *inspired*

*love!*
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: July 11th, 2005 06:49 pm (UTC) (Link)
Whoa, I was Internationalized?! *squees!*
21 whispers :: tell me a secret