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I had to get "Progeny" off my mind, so a quick drabble to that scene...

Title: What If
Words: 100
Rating: PG
Genre: Angst
Spoilers: Progeny

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She falters.

It’s only a split second - a last minute glance as she says goodbye and a hundred other things that never pass her lips - but it’s time enough, and she steps backward into nothing.

Above her, the hollow metal ring still rises, shaking in the wake of bombs.

Then he’s there beside her, warm and real as he grabs her arms, half shaking her, half pulling her into a hug. “Dammit, Elizabeth!” he yells at her, the anger and fear in his voice almost enough to cover everything else.

She can’t believe this is how it ends.

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mspooh From: mspooh Date: August 15th, 2006 02:33 am (UTC) (Link)
A drabble. Really? It's so...short. *pokes*

You killed BOTH OF THEM, OMG! *angsts like whoa*
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 15th, 2006 02:39 am (UTC) (Link)
LOL. I was planning it to be a flashfic, but then I realized I didn't really have anywhere to go once they both... you know, died. *la*
mylittleredgirl From: mylittleredgirl Date: August 15th, 2006 06:01 am (UTC) (Link)
but then I realized I didn't really have anywhere to go once they both... you know, died.

Favorite sentence of the day!

Oh, the fic was fantastic, too. ;)

*loves you*
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 08:47 pm (UTC) (Link)
Hee! Damn their dying together... it always ruins everything. :P

*loves you back* *misses you dearly* *cuddles your baby rat pics*
muldy From: muldy Date: August 15th, 2006 02:38 am (UTC) (Link)
YAY angst and death Aaaw sad but awesome for a drabble...*isnt a fan of drabbles* but that was a good one :)
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 15th, 2006 02:43 am (UTC) (Link)
Hee, thank ya. :)

And seriously, I'm so with you on the anti-drabbles. I usually save it for Christmas cards when space is limited and I'm up for the 100 word challenge. I blame rpf and my need to not spend much time away from it. ;)
unwinding From: unwinding Date: August 15th, 2006 02:45 am (UTC) (Link)
beautiful! so happy to see new fic from you.
plus, your icon is purrrrrty.
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 08:47 pm (UTC) (Link)
Eee, glad you liked! And Lizzie icons are of Teh Hawt! *steals them all*
elvinborn From: elvinborn Date: August 15th, 2006 03:14 am (UTC) (Link)
excellent use of the drabble. I can't believe you just did that. but you did do it well. *conflicted*
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 08:48 pm (UTC) (Link)
Ha! Thanks hon. *loves*
tater_mae From: tater_mae Date: August 15th, 2006 03:29 am (UTC) (Link)
ZOMG!! you are EVIL! and i love you for it! but still! its so short! i want more! where's the rest? you KILLED THEM!! (and that's kind of awesome, but still!)

btw, i like this drabble.

(even if everyone did die.)
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 08:56 pm (UTC) (Link)
I tried to change the ending! In fact, I had this whole scenario where the bomb didn't go off and they looked at each other all "omgwtf?!" and then made a mad dash to a puddle jumper, took it under the ocean, bombed Atlantis from there, made their way to the mainland where death and destruction lingered from the hands of the Wraith, started to have a woobie moment before realizing that the Wraith had followed them, so went all "on the run in the jungle" until the rest of the expedition that made it through the Stargate came to retrieve them.

There you go. ;)
agentcat47 From: agentcat47 Date: August 15th, 2006 04:01 am (UTC) (Link)
OHMIGOD!!! My head is spiiinning. So glad you posted something. I've been checking back every day waaaaaiting for a fic of some sort. Damn you and your wonder drugs. I neeeeddd theeemmm. I cannot believe how that ends. So glad she stayed. I can just imagine them holding onto each other, then... BOOM. *head spin*
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 09:02 pm (UTC) (Link)
Heeeee. *loves you* Thanks for the comments!
angelqueen04 From: angelqueen04 Date: August 15th, 2006 04:37 am (UTC) (Link)
ZOMG! They're dead! LIZZIE! SHEP! Nooo! *flails*

Excellent drabble! Loved how Lizzie stayed and that they got to go out in each other's arms. If they're gonna die, that's how it should be. ;)
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 09:03 pm (UTC) (Link)
Sorry to have killed them! They just really didn't want to stay alive... it was quite bizarre. ;)
anr From: anr Date: August 15th, 2006 12:33 pm (UTC) (Link)
Nice. Brief, but definitely powerful. *loves*
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 09:05 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks hon. :)
drummergurl From: drummergurl Date: August 15th, 2006 06:13 pm (UTC) (Link)
JEN I LOVE YOU AND NEED YOU WHY DO YOU NOT WRITE TO ME ANYMORE??

*stalks*

(Have not seen any SGA yet this year, but I'm sure your fic is brilliant and...very...in keeping with...the story...and...stuff... *wooks*)
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 09:06 pm (UTC) (Link)
*CLINGS TO YOU*

Did you get your package? My computer tells me you signed for it. Talk about stalking. ;)

MISS YOU!
drummergurl From: drummergurl Date: August 24th, 2006 09:23 pm (UTC) (Link)
*LOVES ON YOU IN TOTALLY GAY WAYS*

I LOVE YOU OMFG.

Got the package this mornng (while still dressed in pyjamas and with unwashed hair and unbrushed teeth and completely embarrased in front of the nice delivery man) and grinned and gleed my way through work until I could come back and watch, ahem, four in a row starting with TRW. *WOOKS* What?? I had to watch that one first otherwise I would have died omg!!!1!elevenses!11

Am now gonna proceed to giggle over the image of you (hopefully) smiling when a little bit of me sort of pinged onto your computer today. Heeeeee! I love that you stalk me. ;) I also love that you clearly charged the whole thing to work. >;)
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 09:53 pm (UTC) (Link)
*IZ HAPPILY MOLESTED*

I totally forgot to give you a heads up that it was coming, and the postal service must secretly 'ship us because it got there SO FAST! Did you likey the Sparky postcard? *GRINS* My love for you is creative. ;)

You must watch the ComicCon vids, too. I WILL CONVERT YOU.

I will be available for chat this weekend as I will create massive lies to keep me at home regardless of what work wants. Are you going to be around?

I also love that you clearly charged the whole thing to work.

*affronted* How dare you be totally right say such a thing? :P
drummergurl From: drummergurl Date: August 25th, 2006 04:16 pm (UTC) (Link)
*IZ HAPPILY MOLESTED*

When I right-click that text to copy, as well as giving me that option it also, scarily, offers to "search the web for *IZ HAPPILY MOLESTED*". I dread to think what that would come up with...

Did you likey the Sparky postcard?

Of course. ...Until I realised I had to hide it from non-insane housemate and had a mild panic attack and I searched for somewhere super sekrit in a bedroom which also houses the jointly used computer. ;)

(Also...is it just my computer...but on your journal reply screen the writing is tiny! *squints*)

You must watch the ComicCon vids, too. I WILL CONVERT YOU.

Hehe. I've got to take them to mum's to watch on Sunday as they won't play on Angie's laptop. Is probably safer to watch that away from judging eyes anyway. I can explain the Stargate episodes - she knows I heart teh scifi omg - but strange convention videos which show actors pretending to kiss and many strange obsessive girls giggling over said action is...um...a bit weird. (You're weird too.)

Are you going to be around?

I iz, yo. On Saturday I have work until 6pm (10am your time), but am available for AIM-age from about 8:30pm (12:30pm) onwards, really. If you leave it until Sunday night I'll be at mum's and we could Sheepay (my idea of how the Portuguese might say "Skype"...*wooks*) it up? Or we could do it early Monday morning which would be about 11pm/midnight on your Sunday evening but you'll probably want to get to bed before then. You know what, you give me some options and I'll pick one. :)
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 25th, 2006 04:33 pm (UTC) (Link)
Until I realised I had to hide it from non-insane housemate and had a mild panic attack

*snickers* Oh memories of the good ol' days. ;)

Also...is it just my computer...but on your journal reply screen the writing is tiny!

You know, someone else mentioned that before. But when I reply to a comment in my own journal, it looks fine. I have a feeling it's part of the code I got from Cat when she helped me redo my LJ way back when... I'll have to take a look and see if I can figure it out.

You're weird too.

You just wait. ;)

You know what, you give me some options and I'll pick one.

Let's start with Saturday 8:30pm (12:30pm) and then if our love is not quenched with this chat, we could continue Part Deux with your Sunday Skype idea! (Sheepay, *snort!*)
drummergurl From: drummergurl Date: August 25th, 2006 06:11 pm (UTC) (Link)
when I reply to a comment in my own journal

See, that just makes you sound strange and friendless. >;)

You just wait

I will never want Joe Flannagan and Torri Higginson to make sweet love. IT JUST WON'T HAPPEN. >;) And also, DUDE HE'S MARRIED. *smacks you about and locks you in a room to get you off your addiction* (Although...I would be willing to steal Ben Browder off his wife...maybe I am weird after all...)

Let's start with Saturday 8:30pm (12:30pm) and then if our love is not quenched with this chat, we could continue Part Deux with your Sunday Skype idea!

SWEET. (Ooh I just reminded myself of Marge there. Get her to say it for you and that's how I said it. Yeah.)
nhawk From: nhawk Date: August 15th, 2006 06:23 pm (UTC) (Link)
That whole sequence in the episode and your drabble did funny things to my heart. Kind of ouch but in a good way. ;) Thank you.
phrenitis From: phrenitis Date: August 24th, 2006 09:07 pm (UTC) (Link)
Heh. :) Glad you liked it!
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